This artifact is my rough draft on the literature of diaspora. I was given many generous and helpful critiques from my professor on how to make this piece not only more fluid, but give more of a lasting effect on the reader. A big issue with my piece, was the introduction in which I explain my purpose for writing the piece to begin with. I needed to explain the cormorant more and connect it to diaspora, as that was the premise of the piece. These are things that I started to then take in to mind when I started working on my final draft. My rough draft was also lacking more meat in it as well. My piece lacked a lot of supportive speeches that would help get a better understanding of not only the character but how it circles back to diaspora as a whole. I needed to put more love into my piece, and that was one of the biggest roadblocks that I struggled with when writing this piece. I had felt a large array of feelings within this book and it was one that truly frustrated me. Throughout the novel, I came across feelings of disdain for all of the characters. I hated the way that they would communicate with one another and their actions, but once I took a second, I realized how truly relatable each character is to myself. Once I was able to find that connection with the characters, I was able to get a more personal feeling of writing when it came to beginning my revision. I had a different outlook on what I was writing and it was no longer a dread, but a want to act with intention in revising for my final draft.